Sunday, 6 October 2013

HOLY WAR

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 42; the forty-second edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for the month is "COLOR"

The place would be thronging with people in some time. Zoeb knew it well. He smacked his lips in anticipation. The larger the crowd, the bigger the body count. The chances of missing your shots also reduced significantly with a larger number of potential targets.

He stayed put behind the bushes. There were others like him around, but he hoped no one else would come calling to share space. For hunters, sharing perches was as bad as sharing spoils.

A minute later, a lone young lady came walking out of the building lobby, dressed in executive formals, all decked up, leather bag in tow. She seemed to be looking around suspiciously, as if she was expecting something to happen any moment. Zoeb wasn't surprised.

She was now just a few metres away from his den. He couldn't miss from here.

He felt his weapon again. It felt awesome. A sniper rifle. Brand new, smooth, well-finished.

And most importantly....fully loaded.

He pulled it out, trained it on his target, watched through the telescopic sight, and caught the moving image of the lady at the centre of the cross-hairs.

And then, when he was sure that she was a goner, he pulled the trigger.

"AAHHHH...!!!"

She clutched her soaking-wet, blood-red blouse.

"YOU DIRTY PIG!!! I'LL TELL YOUR MOM ABOUT THIS!!!"

"BURA NA MAANO, HOLI HAI!!!", he screamed, and scampered off deep into the garden.

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46 comments:

  1. Beautiful.....kept me intrigued till last sentence. Very nice.

    Here's mine :
    Binzy - Colours around me

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    1. Glad you liked it.

      ATB for the contest

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    1. The comma suggests you had more to say...shame it didn't get posted

      Cheers
      CRD

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  3. Nice twist...
    Read mine at www.arhamvista.blogspot.com

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    1. Sure thing. Thanks for your time

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  4. This is amazing!! Wat a twist!

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    1. Happy to know you liked it.

      Cheers
      CRD

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  6. Ah!
    Interesting end...
    And I loved this twist!

    All the best for the BAT...
    Link to my post : http://locomente.blogspot.in/2013/10/colors-of-mamma.html

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    1. Thanks for the compliment :) ATB to you too

      Will surely read your post

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  7. CRD is back with an interesting read. Liked it. Keep writing for BAT!

    Someone is Special

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  8. This is Absonfreakinlutely amazing, loved the build-up and the twist is just bang on !!!! ... ATB :)

    Funy i tot i already commented on your post :( .. :P

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    1. Haha. Nice word you've coined there. Absofreakinlutely eh? ;)

      Glad you liked it :)

      Cheers
      CRD

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  9. ah! u wicked wicked man!! u caught me there!!! great twist! lovely!

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    1. Haha...Am I Evil? yes I Am!! ;)

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  10. You got me like you got everyone else. Congrats in advance for the other bit of good news you shared on my post. Just remember not to shave at the wrong time, the rest will be just fine :)

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  11. Narration is an ART.
    You seem to be an artist !

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  12. OMG...I was thinking about a war and was trying to connect it to colors....but you have completely changed it to the end....!!!

    Good one friend..!!

    All the best

    My entry for BAT: Yamini Meduri-Color..!!!

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    1. Thanks a lot Yamini :) On your post

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  13. आह शानदार रचना
    आप ने एक दम से चौका दिया
    जिसे अब तक बंदूक समझ रहे थे वो तो पिचकारी निकली

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    1. Aaj kal ke pichkariyon mein badaa dumm hai miyaan. Acche acchon ki hawa nikal jaati hai :P

      Shukriya

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  14. Hahaha. Holy War.
    Brilliant one CRD. One of the better ones I have read this time at BAT.

    Good luck.

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    1. Aww..thanks mate. You made my day

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  15. interesting take :)
    Good luck for BAT

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    1. Interesting comment :p

      Good luck to you too

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  16. Very nice. I felt the tension throughout. But happy ending.

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    1. I'd call it a really colour-splattered ending...and maybe the beginning of a hunt for Zoeb :P

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  17. This was the first piece I read, from the list of entries for BAT.... but I couldnt comment then :)
    It is really a 'holy' piece of work :)
    Good take on the theme 'Colour' :)
    What can be more colourful than holi !!

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    1. Glad you revisited eventually. I'm a sucker for comments :D

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  18. I totally expected the lady to fall dead :P The ending was a pleasant surprise. What a twist!
    All the best for BAT :)

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    1. You must be relieved I didn't get the poor lass bumped off ;)

      Thanks for your wishes. Good luck to you too

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  19. Hahahahahahaha. :D Epic post CRD. Loved the ending. :D Kudos

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  20. This was beautiful!
    Shall come back for more. :)

    Thanks for the link! :)

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