Sunday 5 August 2012

THE GREAT HOLD UP

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 30; the thirtieth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.



With every passing second, Mr. Dastur was getting impatient.  

Everyone else, on the other hand, was soaking in the sun. At leisure. 

Akbar had gotten hold of a starfish and was showing it off to his three kids.

The Sule brothers - Akshay, Sandeep and little Sandesh seemed to be racing each other. Strangely, they weren't quite running in the same direction. 

Jason was walking all alone. He was probably slightly disappointed that none of the girls had agreed to join them for this picnic. Unfortunately for Mr.Dastur, he too didn't seem to be in a hurry to get back.

Mr.Dastur couldn't take it any longer. He placed his legs closer together. "When the hell are we gonna leave?", he cried out to no one in particular.

Can't blame the old chap. When you wanna pee, you just can't hold on for too long.


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Credits 

Image - Shades of Orange by Harsha Chittar
Courtesy - Curious Dino Photography via www.blogaton.in

36 comments:

  1. lmao - When you wanna pee, you just can't hold on for too long.


    ATB for BAT

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  2. LOL hilarious that was :P
    best wishes for BAT

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    1. Glad you liked it :) Frankly speaking I just tried to weave a story from the pic. If you ntice the old chap in the pic, he seems to be slightly uncomfortable :P

      Cheers
      CRD

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  3. LOL, CRD ;) But he could leave any time right.. nothing "holding" him there ;)

    Leo - My Blog-a-Ton Story

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    1. Wel...erm...he didn't wanna be a bad citizen and pee in the sea...and her had come on a picnic with his neighbours...by a private bus...home was about 10kms away.

      There...your query forced me to add to the story. Guess those dumbass saas-bahu serial producers are already lining up to hire me as a story-writer :P

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  4. hi hi hi.. that was funny. Good one. :D

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  5. LOL...that's too much ! Take a bow....hahahaha

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    1. Thanks...i shall take an arrow too.:P Hey, is india out of the olympics archery event already?

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  6. ha :)

    Man-to-man description of the image. Could never have though someone would do that.

    Mr Dastur definitely looks in a tight spot. I liked the post.

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    1. Simply din't wanna write a sentimental post...plus, had just 15 minutes left to post my entry ;)

      Thanks

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  7. Cool. After reading everyone's depressing stories, was expecting something funny from you. You did not disappoint.

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  8. wow! different from the lot! funny take :)

    good luck!

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  9. I guess this is the only post in the contest that ends on a funny note :) good one and good luck.

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    1. is it? haven't started reading the other entries as of yet. Will do it this evening :)

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  10. now beaches do have toilet!! (in the market beside) especially in india.

    and what a disgrace he is to the cattle class
    .......

    well jk

    this was awesome

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  11. "Can't blame the old chap. When you wanna pee, you just can't hold on for too long" Ha ha loved it so much.. Keep writing.. All the best..

    Someone is Special

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  12. Haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahaaaaaaaaaaa
    this was hilarious!

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    1. Hi..thanks..please read my previous short story post. hope you'll like it :)

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  13. Hahaha :)
    I have no idea what you're talking aboUt here, but I like the organization of this post, the simplicity and how explicit it is ;)
    LOL for not being able to hold peeing for too long :p
    Thankyou for sharing my poem. I feel slot for our minority.

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